沒人給我改作文，只好求助這里的朋友了。大家幫我看看里面有錯的地方嗎？謝謝大家。 My plan for the coming Summer Vacation Summer vacation is coming near. I don’t’ want spend more time on nothing. Therefore I map out a plan for study and sports. First, I would like playing football with my friends in the mooring. Second, I would like to swimming in the weekend. Finally I plan to travel with my parents. The knowledge is power. Therefore I am also plan to spend more time learning English. I have taken a schedule, which include words and oral for the plan. I believe it is useful for my English. I think I will have a good time in this summer.

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相信我，下面的修改過的短文就可以了：My plan for the coming Summer VacationSummer vacation is coming soon。 I don't want to waste my time。 Therefore I mapped out a plan for study and sports。 Firstly, I would like to play football with my friends in the morning。 Secondly, I would like to swim on weekends。 Finally I plan to travel with my parents。Knowledge is power。 Therefore I also plan to spend more time on learning English。 I have made a schedule, which includes words study and oral English。 I believe it is useful to my English。 I think I will have a good time in this summer。 1。would like to play football……表示: 要踢球2。I believe it is useful to my English3。用firstly,secondly合適4。therefore可以， 或用because or since 引出原因從句 。

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有待提高作文，Chinlish比較多，語法錯誤比較嚴重。1。 去掉the coming 2 Summer vacation is coming near－。。is not far from us now。3。spend time on "doing" sth4。I map out a plan for - I have a plan for。。。5。firstly，。。。secondly，。。。finally，。。。。是修飾相連系的論點。但你的作文這三部分內容根本就沒有說出plan for study and sport 有啥聯系。最重要travel不屬于sport，應該屬于活動（activities）6。a schedule, which include －have "a "schedule which include"s"7。words -vocabulary 詞匯8。therefore是一個表轉折的連（表示“然而”），你作文中兩出地方都不適合使用。建議在你沒有掌握之前還是不要盲目使用。最好整篇重新修改吧。

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My plan for the coming Summer VacationSummer vacation is coming near(soon)。 I don’t’ want(to) spend more(much) time on nothing。 Therefore I map out a plan for study and sports。 (the)First, I would like playing football with my friends in the mooring。 (the)Second, I would like (to) swimming in(at) the weekend。 Finally I plan to travel with my parents。The knowledge is power。 Therefore I (am also) plan to spend more(much) time (on)learning English。 I have taken a schedule, which include words and oral for the plan(spoken enlish)。 I believe it is useful for my English。 I think I will have a good time in this summer。隨便修改了一下。原文單詞打上括號的表示要刪去該單詞，原文單詞或短語后面括號里的單詞或短語表示替代原單詞或短語。你這篇文章是按中文寫的吧？以后多看看英文報刊或雜志，學習英文的語句習慣。。

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My plan for the coming Summer VacationSummer vacation is coming near。 I don't want (to)spend more time on anything useless。 Therefore I map out a plan for studying and sports。 First, I would like to play football with my friends in the morning。 Second, I would like to swim on weekend。 Finally I plan to travel with my parents。Knowledge is power。 Therefore I also plan to spend more time learning English。 I have made a schedule, which includes/including new words and oral English 。 I believe it is useful for my English。 I think I will have a good time this summer。 有些小錯誤,但不影響表達。時間/邏輯順序詞用的好!動詞錯誤最好仔細檢查!。

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like to swimming TO DOin the weekend THE?Finally ,The knowledge is power. THE?include words and oral included oral practiceuseful for TO長久沒看英語了，全當練習，過幾天來看答案

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Summer vacation is coming soon. I don't want spending more time on doing nothing. "mooring" is spelling mistake, morning. at the weekend. which includes

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1,I don't want to do...2,Firstly...,Secondly...,Finally...3,I would like to do sth...4,spend...on...