或者還應該增加什么？？？My name is dasha.I'm twenty year.I work at XXX,I'm form in beijing.I was born on august 5。I enjoy a football,a basketball and computer,one of them enjoy computer the best.I want to be fashion designer.

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My name is dasha.I'm twenty years old.I work at XXX. I'm from Beijing.I was born on august 5. I enjoy football,basketball and computer. I like computer best.I want to be a fashion designer.

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hi,iamDashafromBeijingtwentyyearsold, rrentlyiworkatxxx,forbodybuildingilikefootball,basketballect,alsoireallyliketoplaycomputerwheniwasfreeandinthefutureIdowanttobefashiondesigner....

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修改的不錯。

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